Tuesday, December 6, 2011

Forfeit



Sometimes you’re hot
sometimes cold, and I’ve
behaved like a fool
second guessing if I’ll
need a sweater around you.
You’ll catch a cold, you know.
Ice, that’s what you’ve left of my soul.
Your Hyde side, your Jekyll side,
they’ll cause a tornado when they collide.
A whirlwind, makes my emotions swing
Never knowing if your words
are gonna soothe or sting, and how.
This yo yo ride is exhausting;
I'm just gonna get off now.

posted for OLN at dVerse
the photo was taken from Google images 
linked to Fireblossom Fridays @ Real Toads 
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27 comments:

  1. Kathy B.December 6, 2011 at 4:13 PM

    I especially liked the lines that play with the hot-cold metaphor and then swing it into the literalness of the sweater -- nicely done!

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  2. Pat HattDecember 6, 2011 at 4:59 PM

    haha what a fun piece, loved the wordplay and not sure I have a Hyde and Jekyll side, but I'm a fool that's for sure..haha

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  3. TimoteoDecember 6, 2011 at 5:07 PM

    Could it be we know the same person?

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  4. Brian MillerDecember 6, 2011 at 5:45 PM

    sometimes getting off the ride is the best thing...because it can be exhausting...nice capture...

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  5. hedgewitchDecember 6, 2011 at 6:44 PM

    Yeah, been there--bailed.But that contrast of extremes can be so intense, you get hooked to the high and try to ignore the low--great analogy with the tornado.

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  6. ScarletDecember 6, 2011 at 8:29 PM

    Nice contrast of characters and emotions... yes, it can be quite confusing ~

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  7. mrs mediocrityDecember 6, 2011 at 8:37 PM

    yes, it can be one crazy, crazy ride...

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  8. kaykualaDecember 6, 2011 at 9:06 PM

    It gives a headache at the end of it but a fun thing. Exhilarating ride through your verse! Great!

    Hank

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  9. AnonymousDecember 6, 2011 at 9:32 PM

    Wow, so much movement in this one. Wonderful rhythm, and perfect photo to go with it.

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  10. Jill from Killeny GlenDecember 7, 2011 at 8:39 AM

    Okay and when you figure out HOW to get off will you PLEASE right a blog post about it???

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  11. Laurie KolpDecember 7, 2011 at 9:00 AM

    I love the rhythm in this!

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  12. Maude LynnDecember 7, 2011 at 11:07 AM

    Well done! I think a lot of us can recognize that ride.

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  13. tinkwelbornDecember 7, 2011 at 11:55 AM

    hmmm…love is perplexing at times.
    a farewell song to a situation (a carnival ride).
    forfeiture as consequence.
    the persona is being true to his/her self….a good sign.
    nice piece penned here.

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  14. Mark ButkusDecember 7, 2011 at 3:27 PM

    Thanks for the ride, Caty. Exhilarated, I race back to stand in line and ride the emotional wringer once more.
    Cheers,
    Mark Butkus

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  15. Mari Sterling WilburDecember 7, 2011 at 5:33 PM

    Love your work and your site. I'm now following.

    Regards, Mari

    http://www.mariscamera.blogspot.com/

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  16. G-ManDecember 7, 2011 at 7:52 PM

    Caty...
    This was fantastic!

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  17. ShoutforfoodDecember 8, 2011 at 4:02 AM

    nice rhythm.

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  18. sageDecember 8, 2011 at 9:52 AM

    Wow, that's good! I like the wondering over if a sweater is necessary--there are people like that!

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  19. Other MaryDecember 8, 2011 at 11:35 AM

    Caty - I think you've captured this phenom. well with your words. Unfortunately I can relate. I really like the photo you put with it as well, and your closing lines.

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  20. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson BarryDecember 8, 2011 at 2:28 PM

    sometimes cold, and I’ve
    behaved like a fool
    second guessing if I’ll
    need a sweater around you.
    You’ll catch a cold, you know.
    Ice, that’s what you’ve left of my soul.


    superb poetic lines, well done,
    :)

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  21. Dave KingDecember 10, 2011 at 4:13 AM

    A pleasant read.

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  22. FireblossomDecember 10, 2011 at 5:17 AM

    Cold is no fun! Find a warmer clime, girl. Thanks so much for being part of my prompt, Caty!

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  23. MaryDecember 10, 2011 at 10:22 AM

    Visiting from RT: A whirlwind of a poem here!

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  24. Sherry Blue SkyDecember 10, 2011 at 1:06 PM

    Love the final lines especially.

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  25. Kay L. DaviesDecember 10, 2011 at 4:07 PM

    "they'll cause a tornado when they collide" ...I love the rhythm of this line. Very nicely done!

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  26. Rosemary Nissen-WadeDecember 11, 2011 at 7:39 AM

    You say so much so succinctly!

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  27. Mary Ann PotterDecember 12, 2011 at 4:06 PM

    Oh, that sweater and how it ties into the other images! Brilliant!

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